tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post2827775053574140009..comments2023-04-27T10:10:36.337-05:00Comments on Adventure Awaits: The Cage // a spooky storyTracey Dyckhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03445222618456673198noreply@blogger.comBlogger27125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-418468869884678662016-11-22T10:57:35.726-06:002016-11-22T10:57:35.726-06:00THANK YOU, EMILY! *beams* Your parenthetic "e...THANK YOU, EMILY! *beams* Your parenthetic "extremely alarmed by" phrase made me laugh. (Maniacally cackle, that is.) Good to hear that those little details were a success. Thanks so much for reading! I'm always happy to hear your feedback. *hugs*Tracey Dyckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03445222618456673198noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-79886139907832331602016-11-21T14:08:26.460-06:002016-11-21T14:08:26.460-06:00Tracey! This was so good! I loooved (/was extremel...Tracey! This was so good! I loooved (/was extremely alarmed by) the way the cage controlled his thoughts, the way he tried to fight it, failed ... "Time abandoned me". I LOVE THIS IMAGE. Just, all the word choice was spot on. I also liked the details about chemistry and root beer -- even in this short piece, Derrek had characteristics, had a character. Love it!Emilyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08057480293595295502noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-44650536370253035502016-11-06T21:10:19.295-06:002016-11-06T21:10:19.295-06:00Thank you, Imogen! I'm glad the mood changes c...Thank you, Imogen! I'm glad the mood changes came across. You read it twice?? How lovely of you! Seriously, I take that as a high compliment, especially if this isn't your genre of choice. Thanks so much for reading! ^_^Tracey Dyckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03445222618456673198noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-79179136102928516112016-11-03T17:30:15.865-05:002016-11-03T17:30:15.865-05:00Ooh, I love this! So creepy, and beautiful changes...Ooh, I love this! So creepy, and beautiful changes between unease and peacefulness. I had to go back and read it again. Love this part in particular "The shadows blackened again, though the voice continued. Always filled this house? Had it? My memory seemed patchy. I couldn’t recall whether I was hearing the song for the first time or the thousandth." Though really, I loved it all, and I don't even read this genre!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05746017057593508370noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-59104275337717462762016-11-02T16:51:09.534-05:002016-11-02T16:51:09.534-05:00If you think of one, go for it! (I'm sometimes...If you think of one, go for it! (I'm sometimes called Trace, but I'm totally good with new ones, if you think of any. XD)<br /><br />OH BOY. I don't know where it would go next! But maybe one of these days...Tracey Dyckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03445222618456673198noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-25842846469756249932016-11-02T16:50:16.942-05:002016-11-02T16:50:16.942-05:00So I guessed correctly! Sounds like an epic charac...So I guessed correctly! Sounds like an epic character. I've heard so many good things about the Wingfeather Saga!Tracey Dyckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03445222618456673198noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-87894413328013598132016-11-02T08:24:29.722-05:002016-11-02T08:24:29.722-05:00We need to give you a nickname too, Tracey! :D (un...We need to give you a nickname too, Tracey! :D (unless you already have one *nods*) <br /><br />I'm glad you WROTE it! AND YOU NEED TO WRITE MORE OF IT, OH YES. <br /><br />~ Savannah <br />scattered-scribblings.blogspot.comSavannah Gracehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16668452024211579085noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-23489118363101794932016-11-01T12:44:07.078-05:002016-11-01T12:44:07.078-05:00It IS Wingfeather Saga. The Florid Sword is a char...It IS Wingfeather Saga. The Florid Sword is a character, one of the heroes, who runs across the rooftops and saves people from the villainous Fangs.Florid Swordnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-87223928038670509472016-10-31T21:54:17.547-05:002016-10-31T21:54:17.547-05:00Thanks for reading, Skye! <3Thanks for reading, Skye! <3Tracey Dyckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03445222618456673198noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-66673535379768892812016-10-31T21:53:59.414-05:002016-10-31T21:53:59.414-05:00Oooh, I'm so happy to hear that! I feel sorry ...Oooh, I'm so happy to hear that! I feel sorry for him too. Poor, unfortunate soul...Tracey Dyckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03445222618456673198noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-3101108692939803322016-10-31T21:08:55.919-05:002016-10-31T21:08:55.919-05:00Sooo Creepy, masterfully done Tracey!Sooo Creepy, masterfully done Tracey!Skye Hofferthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02385765274513034927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-86225974861911970442016-10-31T20:26:06.264-05:002016-10-31T20:26:06.264-05:00That totally makes sense. xD And yes, it worked ve...That totally makes sense. xD And yes, it worked very well. *nods*Emily Drownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15072107706844583472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-83610242210448855692016-10-31T20:16:48.459-05:002016-10-31T20:16:48.459-05:00The description of the humming sound ran chills do...The description of the humming sound ran chills down my spine! I feel so sorry for poor Derrek. Bluehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08760994961683034493noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-80193741813963198492016-10-31T19:30:15.116-05:002016-10-31T19:30:15.116-05:00Awww, Emily, thanks!
Oh boy, soothing? That's...Awww, Emily, thanks!<br /><br />Oh boy, soothing? That's the feel I was going for with the middle, but it's almost chilling to know it...worked? If that makes sense? Because that's exactly what Derrek feels--peaceful, and then scared out of his mind. XDTracey Dyckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03445222618456673198noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-43122035398426563892016-10-31T19:28:27.203-05:002016-10-31T19:28:27.203-05:00Thank you! Not many people are willing to offer cr...Thank you! Not many people are willing to offer critique publicly, and I appreciate the feedback.<br /><br />I agree, it could definitely be streamlined. I didn't put a lot of time into this story--being rather busy with college, I was just happy to be writing, period. (My poor WIP is moving along at a snail's pace these days.) So this was kind of like a writing exercise for me to keep the creative juices flowing, and if I come back to spruce it up one day, I shall take your tips into consideration!<br /><br />Interesting point about the POV, I must say. I think I slipped into the narrative approach because, as you said, it's the traditional ghost story tack. (But I also tend to write mostly in 3rd person limited, so this was a nice little switch for me.)<br /><br />Anyway, I don't mean to sound as if I'm rejecting your advice, because I'm glad to have it, and it was all spot on. Thanks again! :)Tracey Dyckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03445222618456673198noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-7014978299397273032016-10-31T19:23:38.883-05:002016-10-31T19:23:38.883-05:00Lolzy, thank you! :D And you caught the mood trans...Lolzy, thank you! :D And you caught the mood transitions--wonderful! It starts off intriguing/creepy, segues into a false peace, and then ack, scariness. Or that was the idea, anyway. XD<br /><br />Poor Derrek indeed. I don't know why he had to come into my head with such a sad life, but it seemed to fit.<br /><br />Thanks for hosting it! I plan to make my way around to all the other stories soon, yours included.Tracey Dyckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03445222618456673198noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-24999576074652652462016-10-31T19:21:16.451-05:002016-10-31T19:21:16.451-05:00Meep, thank you, girl! I'm always excited to r...Meep, thank you, girl! I'm always excited to read your comments on these, to tell you the truth, because you're so encouraging! <3<br /><br />BUT AWK, CHRISTINE. DESSERT? YAYNESS! Yeeeeah, Derrek just sort of walked into this story with a miserable life. I feel sorry for him.<br /><br />That's the thing--I DON'T KNOW HOW IT ENDS. I'm in as much suspense as anyone else, because maybe he dies, maybe he finds a way to stop it. *gasp* His father finding him and turning his life around and everyone living happily ever after? That's a good idea, and it makes me happier than the dying option! XD Buuuut who knows if that actually happens. >:)<br /><br />Thanks again!!!Tracey Dyckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03445222618456673198noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-44927709462440943602016-10-31T19:17:25.115-05:002016-10-31T19:17:25.115-05:00*cackles* Thanks, Savvy! (I saw your get to know m...*cackles* Thanks, Savvy! (I saw your get to know me post, and couldn't resist using one of your nicknames. XD) Glad you enjoyed it!Tracey Dyckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03445222618456673198noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-8475783343014131222016-10-31T19:16:30.318-05:002016-10-31T19:16:30.318-05:00Thanks so much! My goodness, it always makes my da...Thanks so much! My goodness, it always makes my day when a silent stalker comes out of hiding. XD Welcome!<br /><br />P.S. I must ask if there's a meaning behind your name. I feel like I've heard of a book that has a "florid sword," whatever it is... The Wingfeather Saga, perhaps? I could be totally wrong.Tracey Dyckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03445222618456673198noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-8540712964045019862016-10-31T16:09:58.745-05:002016-10-31T16:09:58.745-05:00sljfdalfjalkfj! waht even! Tracey, this was gorgeo...sljfdalfjalkfj! waht even! Tracey, this was gorgeous. Your writing is just flawless! This story was chilling and yet... soothing at the same time? I don't even know how it made me feel. o.o But it was good. Very good.Emily Drownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15072107706844583472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-57303749055247077972016-10-31T10:09:11.251-05:002016-10-31T10:09:11.251-05:00I quite like this story, generally. I wrote down ...I quite like this story, generally. I wrote down a few things to consider, though they're all matters of taste, to some degree. There are some words and phrases, and perhaps a couple of paragraphs, that could be cut out to streamline the story. I won't give any specific examples. On the same level, the pacing wanes just slightly in the middle. Looking at the overall structure of the story, I see that you've adopted a more narrative approach (as in 3rd-narrative POV) while using 1st-person. It definitely makes the story feel like a traditional ghost story. I would be interested, on the other hand, in seeing a version of the story that is more present, more reminiscent of 3rd-limited POV. You could develop a less generic voice for the protagonist, and the eerie elements of the story may feel less distant. Again, these are just my thoughts. Your use of language is very good, even if it isn't wholly necessary for the story.Patrick Stahlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09690555802232025818noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-10654940187099724042016-10-31T09:07:01.471-05:002016-10-31T09:07:01.471-05:00QOUEKJNBPOSN I NWOBV oNQAIUVN!!!!!!!!! (That is my...QOUEKJNBPOSN I NWOBV oNQAIUVN!!!!!!!!! (That is my semi-incoherent screaming) what a deliciously creepy story! I love how you crafted the middle section with such peaceful imagery and calm tones, it made me feel what the narrator was feeling, that everything was beautiful and right and good... even though I knew it was a "spooky" story and that something horrible was probably about to happen! Masterfully done! I feel so sorry for the protagonist, though, as Christine said above, what a rough life... and such a horrible ending! Poor Derrek.<br /><br />Thanks for participating in my little blog challenge!Jenellehttp://jenelleschmidt.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-22701584479538373202016-10-30T22:31:25.555-05:002016-10-30T22:31:25.555-05:00WHAT IS THIS OH MY WORD THE GORGEOUS CREEPINESS.
O...WHAT IS THIS OH MY WORD THE GORGEOUS CREEPINESS.<br />O_____O<br />Just...just...WHOOOOOA!!!!!!!!<br /><br />I will not tell you how wonderful a treat this was! Every time I get to read Tracey writing it's like getting to dive into my favorite dessert. IT'S DELICIOUS AND WONDERFUL AND I WANT TO DEVOUR IT FOREVER. And this story. O___O <--- Literally me the whole time reading.<br /><br />Just...AGH. YOU ARE SO TALENTED. This was amaziiing!!! All the tiny details you put in to add realism, such as the character watching beads of condensation roll down the root beer can. Brilliance! And the little hints at his life. Poor guy! No friends, an alcoholic, abusive father. D: And now a haunted house??? Derrek just needs a hug!<br /><br />But...but...this was just SO. GOOD.<br /><br />THAT ENDING THO. What happened???? Did he die? Did he fight it? Did his father find him and seeing his son almost die make his life turn around and they live happily ever after??? Like...MEH. THIS ENDING. You are so cruel!<br /><br />.......In the best way obviously. If it isn't clear yet: I LOVED THIS STORY!!!!!!Christine Smithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15859881278385314279noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-7942705206279468312016-10-30T20:34:42.568-05:002016-10-30T20:34:42.568-05:00CREEPY. ALL the creepiness O.O
This was so good,...CREEPY. ALL the creepiness O.O <br /><br />This was so good, Tracey! You did AH-MAZING at setting the mood - and your descriptions were spot-on! I loved it, great job! *highfive* <br /><br />~ Savannah <br />scattered-scribblings.blogspot.comSavannah Gracehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16668452024211579085noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-84869829455709503372016-10-30T20:23:32.089-05:002016-10-30T20:23:32.089-05:00This. Is. So CREEPY! I love it!
I've been foll...This. Is. So CREEPY! I love it!<br />I've been following your blog for a while. (I guess stalking would be a better word for it, mwahahahahaha). <br />You are the greatest, Tracey!Florid Swordnoreply@blogger.com