tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post5477086978436582515..comments2023-04-27T10:10:36.337-05:00Comments on Adventure Awaits: First Lines (Part 1)Tracey Dyckhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03445222618456673198noreply@blogger.comBlogger31125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-30843309003997956712017-02-10T15:24:16.963-06:002017-02-10T15:24:16.963-06:00Oooh, lovely! I especially like the NaNo line. Sou...Oooh, lovely! I especially like the NaNo line. Sounds like some interesting character conflicts are coming up!Tracey Dyckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03445222618456673198noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-24648197145531377652017-02-04T07:31:34.237-06:002017-02-04T07:31:34.237-06:00Oh, absolutely! I get way too many ideas to write ...Oh, absolutely! I get way too many ideas to write them all as stories, though, so I guess it's inevitable. <br />The first line of my current WIP is: The mist surrounding the dark tower was so dense that it was like an obscuring veil that had fallen over the woods. That needs some editing.... :P<br />This is from my NaNoWriMo novel from November: Her eyes opened. Slowly she became aware of a shriek and an annoyed, unceasing chattering from downstairs. In her mother’s voice. With a moan, she rolled over and sighed. That scream could only mean one thing.<br /> Opal had gone out to the club last night, and gotten an illegal piercing. Again. <br />That one is better. I hope.<br /><br />Florid Swordnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-74028115876164166382017-02-03T10:55:32.545-06:002017-02-03T10:55:32.545-06:00Thank you very much! ^_^ Sometimes you just need t...Thank you very much! ^_^ Sometimes you just need to write a few lines (or a chapter or two) to decide if an idea is worth pursuing, right? What's one of your more recent first lines?<br /><br />Haha, thanks! That was a fun one. XDTracey Dyckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03445222618456673198noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-70692808689652647222017-02-03T10:54:00.270-06:002017-02-03T10:54:00.270-06:00Thanks for the link--I just left a comment!
Well, ...Thanks for the link--I just left a comment!<br />Well, most of the lines I included come from stories I never finished as well. :PTracey Dyckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03445222618456673198noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-65519878878100129832017-02-03T09:29:26.091-06:002017-02-03T09:29:26.091-06:00You are such a good writer Tracey. Yeah, if I were...You are such a good writer Tracey. Yeah, if I were to go through all my first lines... I have nothing but first lines, to be honest. I rarely get more than a chapter into my stories (you can tell if I'm interested in writing something XD) so this would be a very looooooooooong post if I were to attempt it on my (nonexistent [as yet]) blog. <br />I don't think I can choose a favorite of these... I really like the macaroni penguins, though! :PFlorid Swordnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-19343268785142668862017-02-02T20:07:16.255-06:002017-02-02T20:07:16.255-06:00https://ofdreamsandswords.wordpress.com/2017/02/03...https://ofdreamsandswords.wordpress.com/2017/02/03/first-lines/ I had more than I thought, and I didn't put all of them in. I used to start stories and not finish them a lot. Sophia Whitehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10393680730064003675noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-3797084352407184652017-02-01T17:52:16.413-06:002017-02-01T17:52:16.413-06:00ACK, ARIEL, YOU SWEET PERSON. <3 That's so ...ACK, ARIEL, YOU SWEET PERSON. <3 That's so kind of you to say!<br /><br />Imagery is one of my faaaaavorite parts of writing, honestly. I'm just laughing at all the mentions of the macaroni penguins, because it's such a terrible story! Which is probably why it's funny. XD<br /><br />Thanks again! Encouragement like this helps me keep writing!Tracey Dyckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03445222618456673198noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-7094634561315084972017-02-01T17:50:27.005-06:002017-02-01T17:50:27.005-06:00Thanks, Patrick! I really enjoyed writing Ann Mari...Thanks, Patrick! I really enjoyed writing Ann Marie.<br />Hmm, interesting observation. I've been told recently that I have a formal style to my narrative (which can be a good or bad thing, depending--in this particular case, it was bad). If I post the macaroni penguin story, that one's definitely more playful, though in a melodramatic way that pokes fun at itself.<br /><br />Great lines--thanks for sharing. Sky octopi... now that's quite the image! I really like the "Once and For All" line. Personification is so much fun to work with. :)Tracey Dyckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03445222618456673198noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-23330362132243405892017-02-01T17:47:57.507-06:002017-02-01T17:47:57.507-06:00Thank you, Jenelle! ^__^ Please do feel free to st...Thank you, Jenelle! ^__^ Please do feel free to steal it! It wasn't mine to begin with, anyway, and I'd love to read your opening lines.<br /><br />Pfft, the reason there's so many is because most of these come from unfinished works! Some of them I don't ever plan to finish, and others are patiently (or not so patiently) waiting for me to get to them. XD<br /><br />But askfjasldkjfa, THANK YOU TIMES A MILLION. That means a lot coming from a published author. <3Tracey Dyckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03445222618456673198noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-73685311504031972482017-02-01T17:45:56.815-06:002017-02-01T17:45:56.815-06:00Thank you for pointing out that sentence--if I eve...Thank you for pointing out that sentence--if I ever write a full story of this, that may just be the hook! A better first sentence than what I had. :)<br /><br />Ha, trust me--I didn't remember any of these off the top of my head! The only one I have memorized is The Prophet's Quest, and that's because I've been working on that book for years. XD<br />You should totally do a post like this! Drop me a link if/when you do, because I'd love to read it. (And old, not-at-all-skillful lines are the best. XD)Tracey Dyckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03445222618456673198noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-38170756214572611052017-02-01T17:39:50.837-06:002017-02-01T17:39:50.837-06:00Aw, I'm flattered!
Thank you, Blue! Our Desti...Aw, I'm flattered!<br /><br />Thank you, Blue! Our Destiny was one of the most intense flash fictions I've written. My brother picked out a piece of music (same title; it's by Two Steps from Hell), and I had to write something based on that. A really fun exercise, if you like writing to music!Tracey Dyckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03445222618456673198noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-68400799726258777982017-02-01T17:38:40.682-06:002017-02-01T17:38:40.682-06:00Thanks, Lucy! Ah, yes, Prince Tyrus grabbed my hea...Thanks, Lucy! Ah, yes, Prince Tyrus grabbed my heart the minute I started writing him. One of these days I should go write his full story. :) Thanks for reading!Tracey Dyckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03445222618456673198noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-12974945112292650952017-02-01T17:37:39.261-06:002017-02-01T17:37:39.261-06:00CHRISTIIIIINE, WHAT SHOULD I DO WITH YOUR SWEETNES...CHRISTIIIIINE, WHAT SHOULD I DO WITH YOUR SWEETNESS? Thank you is about all I can think of! XD<br /><br />That's the fun of flash fiction and short stories--getting to play around with genres outside my habitual rut (*cough* fantasy *cough*... except almost all of these wound up as fantasy after all? I don't even know).<br /><br />GAH. THAT. THAT JUST MADE MY DAY. I'm so excited to think of you picking it up at a bookstore one day! aklsfjasklfjsalkj <3333 Thank you for all those remarks on the different openings!<br /><br />*gigglesnorts* Flexibility is a good thing, I guess? XDDD I'm 99.9% convinced to post The Quest of a Macaroni Penguin, simply because it's not something I'd ever publish, but it's something to laugh about. XD<br /><br />Thank you so MUUUUUCH! *hugs forever* <3Tracey Dyckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03445222618456673198noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-71018435566948154762017-02-01T17:33:22.566-06:002017-02-01T17:33:22.566-06:00You're so sweet, Madeline! Thank you! Ahahaha....You're so sweet, Madeline! Thank you! Ahahaha...that one has a goofy story behind it, one which I may have to share if I decide to post the whole tale on the blog. ;DTracey Dyckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03445222618456673198noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-55001585945979873412017-02-01T17:31:25.918-06:002017-02-01T17:31:25.918-06:00I agree with Ariel: POST THE SAVANNAH WORDS.
Awww...I agree with Ariel: POST THE SAVANNAH WORDS.<br /><br />Awww, thank you so much, girl! I appreciate that. Though at the wordcount it's at, it might be a bit more than a "pretty LITTLE thing." *coughs nervously*<br /><br />Thanks for reading, Savannah! :)Tracey Dyckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03445222618456673198noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-59737919931565911812017-02-01T17:30:09.447-06:002017-02-01T17:30:09.447-06:00Thanks, Liv! That was a fun story to write. XDThanks, Liv! That was a fun story to write. XDTracey Dyckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03445222618456673198noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-86788739647207084652017-02-01T17:29:47.567-06:002017-02-01T17:29:47.567-06:00P.S. Your new profile picture is adorable! <3P.S. Your new profile picture is adorable! <3Tracey Dyckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03445222618456673198noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-60992555036436968142017-02-01T17:29:08.865-06:002017-02-01T17:29:08.865-06:00EEK, MARY, THANK YOU!!! *hugs* How is it even lega...EEK, MARY, THANK YOU!!! *hugs* How is it even legal for you to make me smile this much? ^_^<br /><br />Maybe I need to post that one in segments--just for laughs. It's an old story, and not terribly skillful, but it would be fun. XD (And actually macaroni penguins are a real thing. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Macaroni_penguin)<br /><br />Thanks! I'm rather partial of number 1, myself. ;)<br /><br />You should TOTALLY share your first lines! I'm sure they're not boring at all. You as the writer might think so simply because you've read them over so many times.Tracey Dyckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03445222618456673198noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-9864655086622400552017-02-01T15:22:15.783-06:002017-02-01T15:22:15.783-06:00OH. MY. GRACIOUS.
TRACEY. I CAN'T EVEN. THE T... OH. MY. GRACIOUS.<br /> TRACEY. I CAN'T EVEN. THE TALENT. *flails* Maybe I haven't read enough Tracey words...cuz I just realized HOW STINKIN' GOOD YOU REALLY ARE. <br /> "He stood alone--a solitary pillar holding up the thundering sky." WUT. The imageryyyyyyy. <3<br /> And that Macaroni Penguin story. LIKE I BASICALLY JUST WANT TO REPEAT EVERYTHING CHRISTINE SAID. <br /> Really, I just want this comment to reveal to you HOW TRULY TALENTED YOU ARE. KEEP GOIIIIIING!!<br />-Ariel<br /> Perran Kidshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08097115041463167608noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-37499365212427705812017-02-01T15:18:02.786-06:002017-02-01T15:18:02.786-06:00 YES DO IT. POST THE SAVANNAH WORDS.
-Ariel YES DO IT. POST THE SAVANNAH WORDS. <br />-ArielPerran Kidshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08097115041463167608noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-19032432786565904212017-01-31T22:11:26.142-06:002017-01-31T22:11:26.142-06:00These are quite good! I think the Ann Marie one i...These are quite good! I think the Ann Marie one is my favorite. I notice a running theme through them, a formal style, with a bit of a Victorian air. That's not to say that each one doesn't have distinct voice (and some are more formal than others), but I'd be interested in seeing something a bit more playful, perhaps. I think we use similar mechanics for how we start stories.<br /><br />Some of my favorite first lines I've penned (chosen from some of my more recent stories):<br /><br />"The sky octopi were doing their dirty work as the line began to form." ("Best in Town")<br /><br />"“I’m not sure we have the same definition of ‘safe’, sir,” said Major Stronson." ("Safe Flight")<br /><br />"Darkness swallowed the horizon in one ravenous gulp."("Once and For All")<br /><br />"Transit Dragoon Charles Haymaker minored in Communications while studying at the Hegemon’s Police Academy." ("White, Rubbery Dragoon Uniform")Patrick Stahlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09690555802232025818noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-25031857213243991582017-01-31T08:52:31.377-06:002017-01-31T08:52:31.377-06:00I mean, I may have to steal this post idea. :)I mean, I may have to steal this post idea. :)Jenellehttp://jenelleschmidt.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-89974904586753299172017-01-31T08:51:40.045-06:002017-01-31T08:51:40.045-06:00These were so much fun to read! I may have to try ...These were so much fun to read! I may have to try this tag... though I have to admit I'm somewhat jealous of HOW MANY first lines you have! I don't think I can pick a favorite, they are all SO GOOD and compelling. I would continue reading any one of these, based on the first line. Jenellehttp://jenelleschmidt.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-79475857942609410242017-01-29T18:07:11.014-06:002017-01-29T18:07:11.014-06:00The first line of "To Fool the Court" mi...The first line of "To Fool the Court" might be my favourite, although, even though it's not technically the first line, "He stood alone--a solitary pillar holding up the thundering sky" pulled me in. <br /><br />For some reason whenever anybody asks me the first line of one of my stories, I can't remember any of them. Maybe I'll do a post like this and include some of the not-at-all-skillful opening lines of my old work. Some are so bad they're funny. Sophia Whitehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10393680730064003675noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6620960568844915525.post-9101614434936816262017-01-29T17:51:15.091-06:002017-01-29T17:51:15.091-06:00That's one of the many things I love about rea...That's one of the many things I love about reading blogs by writers: I get to read their lovely snippets! <br /><br />I like the beginning to 'Our Destiny', and that penguin one is fun! <br /><br />I'm eager to see what you have in store for the next post! Bluehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08760994961683034493noreply@blogger.com